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Hello Everyone! I need you opinion on a poem of mine! Please be honest and don't be worried to tell me if it absolutely sucks, I want to hear the good and (if there is any) the bad. The context is being Bisexual and searching for love in a world that seems like its meant only for "normal" people.

“Remember Him”
By; Jacob Odom

Remember when you longed for love
That someone just for you
Remember what you sat alone
At your table meant for two
Remember when you fell for him
But none could ever know
Remember when your heart cried out
But you could never show
Remember when you told yourself
That “they can never see”
Remember when he touched your hand
And whispered that his, you’ll be
Remember how you skipped a beat
And felt his warm embrace
Remember how he looked at you
With a smile across his face
Remember how he cared for you
When others turned away
Remember how those who really cared
Would have your back and stay
Remember when you told your father
Who told you “Go away”
Remember when you told you love
Then by his side you lay
Now still you feel his warm embrace
And the comfort of his smile
Now loyal to your love you stay
~

Sagot :

Answer:

Awesome! I love the little bits of rhyme and quotation marks. Maybe you could add some commas, but other than that, your poem is great! I think the additive of 'he' and 'his' really adds to the quality. Great Job!

Explanation:

Wow, that's very nice, that's a very good poem! There is one part I had a bit of trouble comprehending the definition of the one part saying "And whispered that his, you’ll be" But I understood it after looking at it a bit closer. very nice "clap clap"