We have to a novel for English, can you please tell me what you think of it so far. There is still lots to be done.

Who would have thought that it would end like this, down on my knees towards the one in front of me with a bloody sword in a cave for witches to sacrifice. To be honest… I never thought it would end like this, I thought I would live a good life with family and you. But no, I guess my time has come. But even if I do fight I could never hurt you more. “I hope I will see you in my next life and be a soldier instead of your enemy. ,”said Senshi Aka. *man stabs woman* THE END
“WHAT!! NO! The story can't end like that! This is too good, why did you have to kill her and out of all people! Whyyyyyyyy?!” I am Nozomu Zetsubo, the one who was upset about the end of the comic (blood Dragon). I am also a teanager who is 18 year old and loves reading fantasy comics. This was the last thing I remember reading in my past life.
It was early morning after I read the comic, I got a job interview from a friend. I was so careless that I forgot it was today. So I ran to put a shirt on with a white tie, a black long skirt, and some flat shoes that were also blue. I ran out of my white house about to take the car, but then I remembered I said I would let my brother use it for his date. So instead I ran across the streets, by building to only fall in the sewers (which was a 50 foot fall).
I woke up thinking it was a dream instead I was in another person's body. I jumped out of the big red bed to see myself in the mirror. I recognized her but didn't remember her. Instead of having long brown hair and brown eyes, I had red long hair and red orange eyes.