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I know this has nothing to do with school, but I need help making my short story proper. Don't bully me, please-

Akira: Hello, my name is Akira Suzuki, I'm 16 years old and I'm a vampire... No, not those blood-sucking vampires in the movies, I'm actually not a big fan of blood, I've tried it once and it was disgusting...anyway-
I got my quirk when I was four, and I grew fangs, and my eyes were sensitive to sunlight- so I couldn't be a hero like those other people. I then got caught up in music and started playing the guitar. I visited UA and played music with a few people, I made some friends there, and everything turned out great!​

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I would suggest-if this is for school- not using three periods but just one. After the first sentence in the second paragraph delete the “and” after four as well as the “and” after fangs. It’s also confusing to lead into the “hero like those other people” when vampires aren’t looked at as hero’s so i’d lead into that.
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