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prompt How will our understanding of who we are shape the goals we develop for ourselves?

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Who am I exactly? What made me who I am? Who will I become? These are questions I often ask myself as I ponder my own existence. Questions like those are important to ask occasionally, but thinking too much about them can influence negative thinking as I have experienced many a time. My present, past and future are what have influenced me to become a technological genius.

So, who am I now? Presently my goal is to become somebody that my family would be proud of. Another of my current ventures is to stop talking bad about myself because I can achieve the impossible, even if now I don't believe it. I want to become someone who works with technology such as computers because my goal is to be able to buy a house and support a family. I have always wanted to have kids with the person of my choice and to achieve that I need money so, I figured I should work with technology because I know that’s an ever-growing field with a myriad of possibilities.

Why did I become the person I am? There are many events in a child's life that are crucial to developing their personality. I remember one event that has impacted my life in a major way. The passing of my great-grandmother was a time in my life when I began to withdraw from others. She and I were very close. We used to make up stories of how we would travel to England, live in a castle, and live like princesses. After her passing, I did not talk about this anymore and I forgot all about becoming a princess. I remember that I did not cry at her passing. I have her picture on the wall and I often talk to her to make me feel better.

What are my plans for the future? I have several things planned for my future and the first thing is to go to college, earn a degree in computer science and get a high paying job. After that I hope to start a family with someone I love. I want to raise my children the right way so that they become successful adults. I want to watch my children grow into wonderful young adults and watch them carve their future.

I am uniquely me, nothing more nothing less. My past has shaped me in many ways, some unknown even to me. I know that if I want my dreams to become reality, I will have to make them come true by carving out my path. My goals for the future can be achieved through hard work and perseverance. I can achieve my goals and so can you.