This is a free-verse poem I had written for school, can I get some critiques please? It's fine if you're harsh- I can take it :)


A deep breath

A feeling of peace

The world is at rest

And so am I

Even though it’s been tough

Even though the clouds sometimes take over

Even though the world is sometimes at war with itself

I push through

And the sun is still shining

And the world is at rest

And so am I

Even if you only win a little

It’s the smaller victories that count the most

It’s the little things you do

It’s the single smile on a rainy day

That can bring change

I gave that smile today

When it was pouring outside

And now the world is at rest

And so am I

It may feel like forever

Since we’ve had a sunny day

But there’s always tomorrow

There’s always a chance to give a smile

To change one person’s life

Even just one person’s day

Because even if the outside world may be at war

My inside world doesn’t have to be

My world can be at rest

And so can I